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University: University of Wisconsin
December 12, 2020 at 5:59 pm

Score: 58.3

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.
  3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 90 words.

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