Reply To: Responsible tourists could preserve the local culture and environment. Some think it’s impossible to become responsible tourists

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University: University of Wisconsin
December 12, 2020 at 10:01 pm

Score: 29.9

Issues:

  1. About 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 40% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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