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University: University of Wisconsin
December 12, 2020 at 10:06 pm

Score: 52.7

Issues:

  1. About 70% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 30% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.