Reply To: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Reply To: Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

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University: University of Wisconsin
December 13, 2020 at 3:23 pm

Score: 57.5

Issues:

  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 25% of the sentences are passive. Convert some of them into their active counterparts.

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