Reply To: Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Reply To: Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.

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University: University of Wisconsin
December 14, 2020 at 1:38 am

Score: 55.1

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Shorten/split them.
  2. About 10% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

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