Reply To: Integrated writing Official 1 Task 1
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University: University of Wisconsin
The [ Both the ]reading and the lecture are both about[/relate to ] how many[the number of ] workdays United States employees should have. The author of the article claims that four workdays per week can benefits[ benefit] both companies and employees. The lecturer[, however, ] cast doubts[ doubt] on the claims[ claim] made in the article. His position is that four workdays will not bring advantages to both sides.
First, the author states that fewer workdays per week will enhance
the campany’s [corporate ]profits because it[ this approach/practice] will lower (the costed mistakes)[unclear ] of employees. The lecturer disagrees with that argument. He claims that this[the proposed measure ] will result in the company’s necessity to hire more employees. The newly hired employees [ new recuits]will[likely ] [incur increased ] cost more medical insurance fee.
Secondly, the author asserts that fewer workdays can decrease [the ]unemployment
rates [rate ]. The article[wrong word ] argues that reducing working hours can provide chances for others who need work. However, the lecturer believes that the measure can not[ cannot] increase employment. Because the companies are not willing[ unwilling] to hire any new staff, they will only expect the [ current]employees now have to complete more work in four workdays.
Thirdly, the author suggests that four day’s work per week
can[should/subjunctive voice ] bring happiness to employees, [punctuation error ]for they can spend more times [spelling error ]with famiies[spelling error ]. Besides, they will also have more spare time to do something they like. In contrast, the lecturer’s stance is that fewer workdays will not lead to a happy life. He notes that every company hopes their supervisors or managers can be five-day workers. Working four days a week may be a disadvantage for employees who seek for [preposition error ]promotion . So that [ because]fewer working day [form error ] will not[is/are unlikely ] lead to happiness i n the future.