Reply To: Some people believe that a college or university education should be available to all students. Others believe that higher education should be available only to good students. Discuss these views. Which view do you agree with? Explain why.

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University: University of Wisconsin
December 16, 2020 at 10:08 pm

Score: 31.9

Issues:

  1. About 80% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Most of them are unnecessarily lengthy. Simplify or split them.
  2. About 40% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. In consideration of sentence coherence, the subject of a sentence better echoes the subject, or the object, of the prior sentence. The subject of a passive sentence, however, often fails to do so, which severely damages the logical flow between sentences.
  3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 120 words.

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