Reply To: The money spent by governments on space programmes would be better spent on vital public services such as schools and hospitals. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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Governments in some countries spend large amounts of money on space exploration
programmes. I completely agree with the idea that these[unclear pronoun/use a noun/noun phrase ] are a waste of money, [punctuation error ] and that
the funds should be allocated to public services.
There are several reasons why space programmes should be abandoned. Firstly, it[ unclear pronoun/remove IT IS .. ] is
extremely expensive to train scientists and
other[ the ] staff i nvolved with [ in support of ] space missions , and
[. Also, the ] facilities and equipment [ integral to such missions ] also come at a huge cost to the government. Secondly, these
programmes do not benefit normal people in our daily lives[absolute statement. It is okay to put ‘these programs have not/did not benefit…because what happened is the fact. However, whether or not they benefit …is an open question (you used present tense) because we will know the answer only in the future. ] ; they are simply vanity projects
for politicians. Finally, many missions to space fail[tense error ] completely, and the[article error ] smallest
technological error can cost astronauts their lives. [ Lack of transition word ] The Challenger space shuttle disaster
showed us that space travel is extremely dangerous, and in my opinion it is not worth the
I believe that the money
from [expent/spent on ] space programmes should go to vital public services instead.
It[unclear pronoun ] is much cheaper to train doctors, teachers, [article error ] police and other public service workers than
it is to train astronauts or the [article error ] scientists and engineers who work on space exploration
projects. Furthermore, public servants do jobs t
hat have a positive [ positively impacting ] impact on every
member of [ article error ] society. For example, we all use schools, hospitals and roads,
and[so ] we all need
the security that the police provide. If governments reallocated the money spent on space
travel and research, many thousands of people could be lifted out of poverty or given a
better quality of life.
In conclusion, my view is that governments should spend money on services that benefit
all members of society, and it is wrong to waste resources on projects that do not improve
our everyday lives.