Reply To: Consumption of the world’ s resources (such as oil, fresh air. Etc.)is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are the causes of this increased consumption? What can people do to reduce it?

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Consumption of the world’ s resources (such as oil, fresh air. Etc.)is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are the causes of this increased consumption? What can people do to reduce it? Reply To: Consumption of the world’ s resources (such as oil, fresh air. Etc.)is increasing at a dangerous rate. What are the causes of this increased consumption? What can people do to reduce it?

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University: University of Wisconsin
January 10, 2021 at 3:21 pm

Score: 35

Issues:

  1. About 70% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
  2. About 40% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. 

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