Reply To: More and more people are using computers and other electronic devices to access information . So, printing of books, magazines and newspapers should not be done. Do you agree or disagree with this?

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University: University of Wisconsin
January 10, 2021 at 3:32 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
  2. About 30% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. 
  3. Lots of grammatical errors.

I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.