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University: University of Wisconsin
January 10, 2021 at 6:31 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 80% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. 

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