Reply To: Some people believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both view and give you opinion.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both view and give you opinion. Reply To: Some people believe famous people’s support towards international aid organizations draws the attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both view and give you opinion.

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University: University of Wisconsin
January 10, 2021 at 6:44 pm

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  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
  2. Some pronouns are unclear in the context. Replace them with nouns or noun phrases.

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