Reply To: In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people to do this.

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University: University of Wisconsin
January 12, 2021 at 7:10 pm

Score: 61

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  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. 

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