Reply To: To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards

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University: University of Wisconsin
January 12, 2021 at 7:30 pm

Score: 29.2

Issues:

  1. About 55% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. 
  3. Lengthy paragraphs. Restrict each paragraph to 110 words.

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