Reply To: Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now. Reply To: Famous entertainers and athletes deserve to have more privacy than they have now.

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University: University of Wisconsin
January 21, 2021 at 7:07 pm

Score: 53.7

Issues:

  1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
  2. About 30% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. 

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