Reply To: TPO 54 – The Salton Sea in California – Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they respond to the specific concerns presented in the reading passage.
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University: University of Wisconsin
This reading passage
has proposed [proposes ] three solutions to the problem of increasing salinity in the Slaton Sea in California. However, the professor does not consider the given solutions as [being ]realistic and practical. To begin with, from [According to ]the reading passage, special desalination facilities can remove the salt from the lake through evaporation. Although the professor agrees it[ unclear ] can decrease the [article error ]salinity, she points out that serious problems can arise by doing so. More specifically[ For instance ], the solid materials left behind can pose a potential health threat. If the[article error ] wind sweeps[grammatical error ] some of (these)[new idea introduced abruptly ] toxic chemicals into the air, people may [grammatical error ]breathe them in and have health problems.
Besides, the reading passage considers diluting [article error ]salt level with the water from the ocean as another valid[wrong word ] solution. Even though the professor agrees it[unclear ] may help solve the salinity problem, she does not think it[unclear ] is a viable solution
in reality. The main reason is that [since ] this method requires constructing pipes. (However, the local government may not have the resources to pay them.)[confusing/unclear ] She[ The professor further ] argues that this[unclear pronoun ] can be a significant problem, (given that these pipes can be very long and need lots of piping materials)[ wordy ]. As a result, the cost of constructing such pipes can be very expensive[wrong word/ cost-expensive? ].
Moreover, the reading passage proposes to build walls [ as a means ]to divide lakes into several sections. [ missing a transitional word ]The freshwater from small rivers can help reduce the [ article error ]salinity of the large sections. Yet, the professor does not believe it[ unclear pronoun ] can work for a long time. When earthquakes occur, these walls may collapse. As a result, the freshwater will mix[ wrong word] back to the small rivers.
In a nutshell, the professor thinks the three proposed solutions are impractical and unrealistic.
Her reasons are summarized and explained above[write more creatively ].