Reply To: In many countries, the proportion of older people is steadily increasing. Does this trend have positive or negative effects on society?

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University: University of Wisconsin
January 27, 2021 at 2:17 am

Score: 48.2

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
  2. About 15% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. 

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