Reply To: Some people think those oldest school children should learn a wide range of subjects and develop knowledge. Others, however, think that they should only learn a small number of subjects in detail.

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January 28, 2021 at 3:07 am

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
  2. Lots of grammatical errors.

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