Reply To: People continue to commit crimes even after being punished for it. Why do you think this happens? How can crime be stopped?

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing People continue to commit crimes even after being punished for it. Why do you think this happens? How can crime be stopped? Reply To: People continue to commit crimes even after being punished for it. Why do you think this happens? How can crime be stopped?

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University: University of Wisconsin
January 29, 2021 at 8:46 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 35% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them.
  2. About 30% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. 

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