Reply To: At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.
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February 3, 2021 at 3:06 pm
Score: 38.6
Issues:
- About 45% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
- About 20% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision )
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