Reply To: It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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Nowadays, there is a growing demand for Internet usage. We need to surf the Internet, browse many websites for information and chat with our friends or relatives everyday. In this case, the quality of Internet access seems to be essential. Some people claim that improving Internet access is the duty of individuals or Internet companies instead of governments
. At the same time, governments [, which, as they argue, ]should spend money to improve public transportation. However, [with respect, however, ]I believe the other way around.
First of all, improving Internet access
meets the requirement of developing science and technology[ can facilitate scientific and technological development ]. (As we know)[redundant ],( science and technology have become the main topics since 2000)[ unclear]. Meanwhile, almost every government is making efforts to improve their [ pronoun error ]technology in the network. For example, 5G is commonly used these days[absolute statement/specify the context ], and the[ Chinese ] government[/China ] of my country has already set up some Internet facilities . These[ , which ] provide the whole country with a better Internet environment (with higher speed and more comfortable experience while surfing the Internet)[confusion/ environment — high/fast speed… who is surfing? ]. (What the government has completed)[replace this with a noun phrase ] not only improves Internet access but also (reinforces the reputation)[ unclear ] of my country[China ] because of the up-to-date technology [ use this phrase as subject ].
Secondly, (promoting the development of)[ use one word ] Internet access is indeed (money and energy-consuming)[word structure issue ].( In the beginning)[wrong phrase ], we have to hire some engineers to discover[/develop ] the[ article error ] new technology, and then we
will face [need to address ]the[ article error ] challenges coming[ranging ] from (setting the sites)[unclear ] to build[ing ] the[ article error ] Internet facilities. After that, (workers will be needed)[passive/shift of subject ] to build those facilities. Only with the[ article error ] financial support from governments[ word form error ] can we finish[/complete ] the whole process. For example, we can use the investment to offer salaries to workers, purchase building materials or prepare for some emergency.
Admittedly, spending money on public transportation is essential, as public transportation( means a lot for us to commute or hang out)[repetition/ means a lot = commute or hang out ]. However, [since ] public transportation
has already [ is well ]developed quite well in many countries . So [, ]it is time for governments[word form error ] to (pay more attention to)[replace with one verb ] Internet access that has not been developed perfectly.
In conclusion, improving Internet access is the right field for governments[word form error ] to spend money [ on ].
[In general description, use government instead of governments. ]