Reply To: It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours.

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University: University of Wisconsin
February 9, 2021 at 10:21 pm

Score: 79

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing);
  2. About 11% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );
  3. Zero conditional sentences (change to conditional sentences);
  4. Grammatical errors, particularly with subjunctive voice;
  5. Article (THE) errors;
  6. Unclear pronouns (i.e. IT)

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