Reply To: Were people friendlier in the past than they are today?
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University: University of Wisconsin
In [/During ]my childhood,
recalls from my grandparents [‘ recalls ] about their old stories, even [with minimum ] smallest details, had all left a deep impression on me. Those stories presented pure and close [ interpersonal ] relationships in the twentieth century. However, despite [Despite ]more social connections [, which were primarily driven by the ] through Internet nowadays, relations among people seem to be (drifting away) [dwindling ]. Therefore, I have to admit [As such, I am congruent with the statement ]that people in the past were friendlier than people are now.
First, human relationships
become [are becoming ] more complex, especially in business [increasingly commercialized and self-interested ]. In today’s money-oriented world, [ many ] friendships [ derive from ] may be built on the basis of [the pursuit of ]commercial profits. People are gradually getting accustomed to such a modern way of making friends. For instance, in [ In ]order to accomplish a successful bargain, both sides [of a business transaction ] will [tend to ]show friendliness to each other. But friendship behind such smiles on the surface is unstable. Once the bargain fails [, ] to meet expectations of any side, their relationships [ the fabricated friendliness ] may break up subsequently. [evades. ]
heavy burdens from work [pressure from the workplace also deprives many folks of the occasions where they could ] make time too limited for people to express friendliness. After all, everyone has to cherish [their ]time to fight for their survival . In order to meet deadlines, people [ , and therefore they need to prioritize professional obligations ] prioritize finishing their work rather than maintaining relationships with others . Therefore, people consider friendly chats as just a waste of time. Instead, they focus on their tight schedules, which makes [, thereby making ]their relations more isolated.
By contrast, simplicity may be the best word to define people’s relationships in the past.
For instance, before [ prior to the arrival of the ] maturity of [so-called ]market economy in China, most of the university graduates [ had ]attained long-term jobs assigned by the government. Such stable work increased [ /fostered ] (cohesion in groups) [ gregarious cohesion ] since workers had fewer competitions. Under this circumstance, people found it easier to make good connections with their colleagues.
In a word, people’s friendliness keeps decreasing today.
So [In light of this undesirable trend, ] I think it is a must for us to discover [ing ] the hidden friendliness and express it bravely, just like our older generations did [would perhaps benefit most of us. ]