Reply To: TPO28 Task1
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University: University of Wisconsin
Both the reading and [ the ]lecture discuss whether Peary reached the North Pole [or not ]. The author[specify the context of the author ] supports Peary’s claim (due to three arguments)[ unclear ]. Yet, the professor cast doubts on these arguments, concluding they were (not convincing.)[avoid using Not ]
First of all, Peary’s consistent and persuasive accounts (in the committee)[unclear ]
declared the truth of [validate ]Peary’s claim (in the passage)[ unclear ]. However, according to the lecture, the professor challenged[ present tense is fine ] (this argument)[ unclear ]. She claimed [ tense issue ]that this committee consisted of Peary’s friends. Hence, the claims[ word form error ] of this[/the ] committee were (not completely objective)[ avoid using NOT ]. Meanwhile, it[ unclear pronoun ] only had two parts, which[ unclear pronoun ] were biased (for the result)[ unclear ].
Moreover, since Tom Avery made the same trek in less[wrong word ] than 37 days, the passage[ specify: passage can mean different things ] claimed[ tense error ] that (Peary’s reaching as possible)[ unclear/grammatical error ]. Conversely, the professor opposed[tense error ] this argument
as well. She said that what Avery experienced were[ grammatical error ] too[ wrong adverb: too…to ] different from Peary’s (condition)[wrong word ]. For example, although they[unclear pronoun ] used the[article error ] (same kind of dogsled and the number and breed of dogs)[sentence structure issue ], Avery (spent less)[unclear: time, money, energy? ], (such as no transforming food)[ unclear/grammatical error ]. Hence, it[unclear pronoun ] was an unfair condition[ wrong word ] to compare them[ unclear pronoun ]. In other words, (what Avery spent)[ use a noun or noun phrase ] (could not)[ avoid using NOT ] support Peary’s accounts.
Finally, the (reading)[ unclear ] argued[ tense error ] that (the photographs)[ new, unclear information ] supported[tense error ] the truth of Peary’s claim. (By measuring the shadows of[ article error ] photographs, calculating_[ dangling ] the Sun’s position was possible. However, the professor disagreed[ tense error ] with the usefulness of this [ accurate ]method
. The method measuring shadow was precise. She claimed[ tense error ] that the[ article error ] photographs faded [ grammatical error ]over [ the course of ]time. Therefore, photographs produced 100 years ago were[ tense error ] useless to compute the Sun’s position in the sky. Hence, the results of this method could not[ avoid using NOT ] support [repetition ]Peary’s claim.