Reply To: Because modern life is very complex, it is essential for young people to have the ability to plan and organize.

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University: University of Wisconsin
February 16, 2021 at 8:24 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 60% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
  2. Lengthy paragraphs; restrict each paragraph to 110 words. (GRE essay 110-word qualifies for non-software revision; 90- word applies to TOEFL/IELTS essay )
  3. Extensive use of adverbs.

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