Reply To: Government should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

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University: University of Wisconsin
February 22, 2021 at 1:42 am

Score: 55.9

Issues:

  1. About 20% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );
  2. Extensive grammatical errors.

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