Reply To: Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Reply To: Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

February 26, 2021 at 5:06 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. Lots of grammatical errors;
  2. About 15% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );
  3. Remove the last sentence in the first paragraph.

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