Reply To: Government should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing Government should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Reply To: Government should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.

February 28, 2021 at 7:35 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
  2. Lots of redundancy/article/wordy problems or errors (software is unable to identify these issues.)

I will send you screenshots to illustrate specific problems/errors.