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In some people’s opinion, having a home (is more significant)[ replace BE+adj with verb ] than renting one.
There are some reasons that houses give people a [ I believe the ] sense of belonging and stability [ in life ] [ are primary factors behind ] leading to this phenomenon. However, I think this phenomenon [ I also believe that this trend can ] cause adverse effects to society.
Firstly, owning a home[, rather than renting one, ] gives[/brings one ] a sense of belonging
for people compared to renting one. People think that a place with [ since ] a house is [ regarded by many as ] their home , but if [ . If ] they rent [grammatical error ] a house, they may[ grammatical error ] think they live in the[ a ] home of [ owned by ] other people. For example, people who have their own houses can decorate it as they like. However, if they rent [grammatical error ] one, they have[grammatical error ] to comply with the request of their landlords.
[What’s more, people need a stable life to develop ourselves[shift of person ] . Living in (the own )[ unclear ] house gives us[ shift of person ] a stable environment. People[ shift of person ] don’t have to think about whether the owner of the house will kick us out. After all, the house belongs us forever. We will be more focused on our work or study.][confusing paragraph due to shift of person ]
(These reasons are positive)[unclear ] but it is[grammatical error ] not a good situation if everyone wants[ grammatical error ] to have their own house. The case[new information introduced without preparation ] is that the price of the [ article error ] house may increase if everyone wants to buy it[unclear pronoun ] . The needing [ word form error ] for housing enlarges but the amount of housing is[ use concrete verb to replace BE verb ] limited so that the price rises. Then, someone who has less money can not[word form error ] afford a house. For example, recently, house prices are[ grammatical error ] rising, and then people’s happiness index is getting lower.
All in all, people should change their view[ word form error ] about buying a house or renting it. Although there are many advantages to[ wrong preposition ] buying a house, we can not[word form error ] ignore the negative impact of it[ unclear pronoun ] on society.