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March 15, 2021 at 4:59 pm

It is always a debating[word form error   ] topic when it comes to how [ How  ]governments should allocate their budget [ remains a debatable topic  ]. Some claim that their governments should spend more money on the[article error   ] arts while others think governments should pay more attention to athletics. I think governments should support more[ misplaced word  ] the[ article error  ] arts due to the [ their  ]wide effects on people’s daily life.

The[Article error   ] arts involve more people. The[ article error  ] arts can be presented in various forms, including[ ,  ] but not limited to [ ,  ]photography, paintings, dramas, music and dance. This diversity indicates that the arts can attract many people of different ages, sexes[/genders   ], and backgrounds. With more money invested in the arts, governments are creating a more diverse, harmonious society. For example, governments can help[ /to help  ] maintain museums or[to   ] make them free for all citizens [to access   ][‘help xx to do’ is formal as opposed to ‘help xx do’    ]. In this way, no matter rich or poor, young or old, people can [ readily  ]enjoy great historical artworks whenever they want. It[ unclear pronoun  ] is a practical way to let[This practical approach also relate to   ] people know that governments are caring for all people[ them.  ], especially their needs to build inner wisdom.[unclear   ]

The[ article error  ] arts also relate to other fields. Some people say that the[article error   ] arts (are just about)[ change Be verb to concrete verb  ] abstract feelings, like aesthetics and emotions. However, the arts can do far more than that. People have been exploiting art in the[article error   ] healthcare, psychological, and technological field. For instance, researchers have proved that music therapy is effective in improving the[ some patients’  ] cognitive and physical abilities of patients[ zero-conditional writing  ]. Besides, the interaction between art and new technology, like digital art, is reshaping the world people live in. [ missing a transition word  ]The[ article error  ] arts are beneficial in almost all aspects of our society now[redundant   ].

Though supporting sponsored[ redundant  ] Olympic teams is useful in winning glories for (a state or a country)[ redundant  ], the[article error   ] arts can do the same. Take Tan Dun as an example, the [ a  ]Chinese composer[ ,  ] earned a great reputation for traditional Chinese music in the western world [nations   ]through (Crouching Tiger, Hidden Dragon)[ unclear  ]. In other words, art is a [ an effective  ]way to spread the[a   ] traditional culture to the whole world.