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It is always a debating[word form error ] topic when it comes to how [ How ]governments should allocate their budget [ remains a debatable topic ]. Some claim that their governments should spend more money on the[article error ] arts while others think governments should pay more attention to athletics. I think governments should support more[ misplaced word ] the[ article error ] arts due to the [ their ]wide effects on people’s daily life.
The[Article error ] arts involve more people. The[ article error ] arts can be presented in various forms, including[ , ] but not limited to [ , ]photography, paintings, dramas, music and dance. This diversity indicates that
the arts can attract many people of different ages, sexes[/genders ], and backgrounds. With more money invested in the arts, governments are creating a more diverse, harmonious society. For example, governments can help[ /to help ] maintain museums or[to ] make them free for all citizens [to access ][‘help xx to do’ is formal as opposed to ‘help xx do’ ]. In this way, no matter rich or poor, young or old, people can [ readily ]enjoy great historical artworks whenever they want. It[ unclear pronoun ] is a practical way to let[This practical approach also relate to ] people know that governments are caring for all people[ them. ] , especially their needs to build inner wisdom.[unclear ]
The[ article error ] arts also relate to other fields. Some people say that the[article error ] arts (are just about)[ change Be verb to concrete verb ] abstract feelings, like aesthetics and emotions. However, the arts can do far more than that. People have been exploiting art in the[article error ] healthcare, psychological, and technological field. For instance, researchers have proved that music therapy is effective in improving
the[ some patients’ ] cognitive and physical abilities of patients[ zero-conditional writing ]. Besides, the interaction between art and new technology, like digital art, is reshaping the world people live in. [ missing a transition word ]The[ article error ] arts are beneficial in almost all aspects of our society now[redundant ].
sponsored[ redundant ] Olympic teams is useful in winning glories for (a state or a country)[ redundant ], the[article error ] arts can do the same. Take Tan Dun as an example, the [ a ]Chinese composer[ , ] earned a great reputation for traditional Chinese music in the western world [nations ]through (Crouching Tiger, Hidden Dragon)[ unclear ]. In other words, art is a [ an effective ]way to spread the[a ] traditional culture to the whole world.