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How governments should allocate their budget remains a debatable topic. Some claim that governments should spend more money on art while others think governments need to (pay more attention to)[ subsidize ] athletics. I prefer that governments give more financial support to art considering its widespread influence on people’s daily life.
Art involves (more people)[unclear ] . Art can be presented in various forms, including, but not limited to, paintings, dramas, music and dance. This diversity indicates [/means ] that art can attract people of different ages, genders, and backgrounds. [ As such, ]
With more money invested in art, governments are creating a more diverse, harmonious society [ through art investment ] . For example, governments can help to maintain [government-funded ] museums or to make them [provide a ] free[ access ] for all citizens to access. In this way, no matter rich or poor, young or old, people can readily enjoy great historical artworks. [, allowing people to appreciate and peruse art works/pieces/exhibits. ] This practical approach also relates to people that governments care for them.
(Art also plays an important role in other fields.)[unclear ] Art can do far more than merely describing[/revealing ] abstract feelings, such as aesthetics[ wrong word ] and emotions[wrong word/same as feelings ] . (Professionals have been exploiting art in healthcare, psychological, and technological areas.)[ Unclear ]
Researchers[sudden shift of object ] , for instance, have proved that music [ Music ] therapy[, for instance, ] is reliable in improving[can improve ] some patients’ cognitive and physical abilities[ /capabilities ] . Besides, the[ article error ] interaction between art and digital technology is reshaping the world.[ incomplete sentence ] That is, [ Apparently, ] art is beneficial in almost all aspects of our society.[ unclear]
While sponsoring Olympic teams is useful in winning glories for a state, art can do even better. (China earned a reputation for the Academy Award- and Golden Globe Award-winning film Crouching Tiger, Hidden Dragon)[unclear ] , which in turn [invited ]
interested many (foreign people)[ impolite writing ] to know[ /learn ] more about Chinese culture and to visit China[ by visiting this nation ] . In other words, art brings about not only short-term benefits but also (long-term advantages)[repetition ] ,[ punctuation error ] as an effective way to spread a traditional culture worldwide.
In conclusion, governments should spend more money on art instead of athletics to gain multiple benefits.