Reply To: If people have the opportunity to get a secure job, they should take it right away rather than wait for a job that would be more satisfying. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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In my opinion, considering[ dangling modifier ] the environment of [ article error ]workplace, this statement is true if one wants to work in government or university as it[ unclear pronoun ] might not fit for those who want[ repetition ] to take (a job in a company)[ wordy ].
First, for those who want[ repetition ] to devote their life time [ spelling error ]to academic research, (it will be their best choice to grasp)[ wordy/ grasping …will be their best.. ] the job opportunity at once. Competition in universities and institutions is highly[redundant ] harsh. Nearly 30 [ thirty ]young
doctors[Ph.D. graduates ] have to compete with each other , chasing for only one work opportunity, according to the head of the Department of Sociology, Peking University[wordy/lengthy sentence ]. Taking a chance away means that you[ shift in person ] have to start a new [ round of ] challenging competition again. No one could make sure of the possibility of your[ shift in person ] success. In this case, (it is better)[ wordy/vague ] to get the current job opportunity.
Second, this statement also applies to those who want to get a job in government. According to (research in 2019)[unclear ], the content of different works[ spelling error ] in government resembles[ grammatical error ] regardless of the area and the department one work[ grammatical error ] in[ /during ] the first several years in one’s career. In this case, the benefit of waiting for another job (is pretty)[ replace BE verb with concrete verb ] low and couldn’t[ unparalleled verbs/ is- couldn’t ] cover the risk of giving up the current work opportunity.
Third, this statement might not be suitable for those who want [ repetition ]to work in companies. (There are plenty of companies offering)[ wordy ] work opportunities in the market. Even if you[shift in person ] give up one opportunity, (there are still several offers )[ wordy ]you could choose. Besides, the salary and environment of different companies (are different)[change to concrete verb ]. The salaries of (same jobs )[ unclear ]in Tecent [ spelling error ]could be 85 percent higher comparing[dangling modifier ] with Huawei. It[ unclear pronoun ] is a good choice[vague ] for one the [ grammatical error ]take one offer away and wait for another one that would be more satisfying.
In conclusion, whether the statement is true[or not ] depends on the area you[ 2nd person is informal ] want to work in. For those who want to work in university and government, this statement is quite proper. However, if one wants to get a job in [article error ]private company, this statement might not fit the actual situation of him.