Reply To: At universities and colleges, sports and social activities are just as important as classes and libraries and should receive equal financial support.

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March 30, 2021 at 1:45 am

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
  2. Lots of unclear sentences and grammatical errors.

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