Reply To: Tpo54
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Partial Revision [most sentences are problematic.]
In modern society, people [ /citizens can ] oversee the[article error ] government finances.[ missing a transition word here ] Controversy arises with more attention being put to arts or athletics[ unclear ]. Some point[ out ] that government should spend more money on arts instead of sports, but I reject[ incomplete sentence ].