Reply To: Some people think the high sales of products reflect the power of advertising instead of the consumers’ demand. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people think the high sales of products reflect the power of advertising instead of the consumers’ demand. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Reply To: Some people think the high sales of products reflect the power of advertising instead of the consumers’ demand. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

April 3, 2021 at 3:21 am

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 15% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );
  2. Replace unclear prepositions that contain unclear information. i.e., advertisements with famous…;
  3. Replace unclear pronouns (i.e., IT) with clear nouns.

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