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[ On the wings of/In the wake of technological advancement, ]The[ article error ] past few decades have witnessed unprecedented improvements in our society.
Advanced technologies have significantly changed our life. [ There is no causal link between societal improvements and movies/televisions ]In the meantime, the effects caused by movies and televisions arise[wrong word ] great concern. In my perspective, these two newly invented media have[ vague word ] more[ more … than ] positive effects on the young generation.
First of all, movies and television provide
a more [ an ]efficient way to acquire knowledge. (In combination with images and sounds, people)[dangling ] can efficiently (access the messages)[ unclear ] they want. They can concentrate on the information that displays on movies and TVs. Compared with newspapers and books, these two media have more appealing characteristics that attract young people to learn. For example, when I was a child, my favorite program was Discovery The[ spelling error ] Earth. Every night I would wait urgently[ wrong word ] in front of the TV to see the mysteries of the earth[spelling error ]. This program taught me lots of things, such as the formation of mountains and (the process of the water cycle)[unclear ]. Television acted like a vivid encyclopedia during my childhood. Consequently, I fell deeply in love with geography[ spelling error ].
What’s more, movies and televisions can be outlets for venting stress. Nowadays, the young generation is experiencing ever drastic competition in daily life. The heavy load of study needs to be relieved. Watching a movie or a TV show is one of the most convenient and accessible ways to relax.
Young people can afford the expenses. When I am stressed out, I always go to the cinema with my friend. By immersing myself in the plot, I can get away from my daily annoyance and feel refreshed. What’s more[repetition ], exchanging opinions with my friends also makes me feel relaxed[repetition ] and delighted. There is no doubt that it[unclear pronoun ] is an excellent way to enforce friendship.
Indeed, there are some disadvantages to[wrong preposition ] electronic media. But young people can foster self-control when they face lures. The positive side of movies and television is more[more than ] salient.
In conclusion, (the shortcomings and advantages)[ unclear ] both exist.[ punctuation error with coordinating conjunctions ] But the positive effects are more than the negative ones.