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The three sentences are inorganically linked, which means that they lack logical connections. You need to create a preparation that could logically flow to your thesis. I.E.,
Art helps to foster our sense of aesthetics; for this reason, the government’s spending on artistic activities seems to be justifiable. Since art serves only a tiny portion of the population in most societies, I believe state funding on sports, instead of arts, could benefit more people, particularly as this pandemic lingers.