Reply To: Educational institutions have a responsibility to dissuade students from pursuing fields of study in which they are unlikely to succeed.

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April 6, 2021 at 2:43 am

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 85% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
  2. About 35% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );

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