Reply To: In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Reply To: In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies.

April 8, 2021 at 1:48 am

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
  2. Lengthy paragraphs; restrict each paragraph to 90 words.
  3. Lots of grammatical errors.