Reply To: In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Reply To: In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

April 8, 2021 at 3:50 pm

Some people think that young people depend[ grammatical error ] too much on their parents when they make[grammatical error  ] decisions in the past. [loss of logical connection with the prior sentence  ] However, young people today are more likely to make vital decisions by themselves. I agree with the statement[ unclear ] . The reasons are as followed.[summarize the reasons  ]

First, nowadays young people can gain access to the Internet which makes them get information and knowledge more conveniently[restructure this sentence to make it better correlate with the thesis  ] . In this case, they can search for information to help them make decisions independently[ redundant ] . (The volume of knowledge on the Internet is too abundant to surpass their parents’ knowledge)[ confusion ] . Therefore, young people are able to gain more [ can glean ] helpful information from the Internet (other than)[ wrong phrase in this context ] their parents. For example, when students have to apply for [ article error ] grad school (after graduation)[ redundant …when ] [punctuation error  ] they always check the[article error  ] university’s official website to look up important information such as the admission rate and courses of[the course offerings concerning  ] a program. According to the info on the university website, students can have[use a stronger verb  ] a deep understanding of[ /about ] a program[ punctuation error ] and therefore they can (make decisions to find a program for themselves)[ confusion ] . In this process, parents can give limited advice to them.

Second, in the past parents can[ grammatical error ] help young people to make decisions because they have[ grammatical error ] more experience[word form error  ] in many aspects than young people. However, young people today can have more experience[  word form error] in some aspects than their parents. With[ unclear preposition ] the rapid development of technology, there[dangling subject  ] are many kinds of electronic products appear[grammatical error  ] like mobile phone and computer. Most young people are familiar with electronic products[repetition  ] than parents. For instance, young people know how to select a mobile phone by comparing the[ article error ] price[ word form error ] , CPU and (other properties)[confusion; this implies that Prices is also one of such properties  ] of mobile phones. In the contrast[wrong phrase  ] , their parents (may don’t)[grammatical error  ] know much[wrong word  ] than [too many ‘ more than’  ] their children about the properties of those electronic products. In this case, they[ too many unclear pronouns ] may depend on young people to make decisions.

In a word, I think young people today can make decisions more independently[word/phrase repetition  ] .