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The 21th[spelling error ] century is the century[repetition ] of [ article error ]internet. The improvement of network technology has changed our lives greatly.[punctuation error with coordinating conjunction ] So if we follow[gramamtical error ] this logic[unclear ], we would( take the development of internet access as the most important thing)[ unclear ]. However, (I hold the view that it’s more crucial to spend money on public transportation. My reasons are as follows.)[cliches ]
Firstly, the internet indeed created a marvelous virtual world for us. [ punctuation error with coordinating conjunction ]But that’s not the one we’re living [ unclear]. The movie Ready Player One also discussed[grammatical error ] this question. (With advanced cyber technology and VR devices)[ unclear], people can immerse themselves in the virtual world. Correspondingly, nobody cares about the[article error ] reality[ zero-conditional issue], abolishment and poverty began to grow[unclear ]. In order to solve this problem, the male lead changed this situation[ unclear ] by closing the server temporarily and rebuilding basic construction[unclear ].[ punctuation with coordinating conjunction ] And that’s exactly what I am going to illustrate. Since public transportation plays an irreplaceable role in our lives. [ grammatical error ]Its’ perfection is one of the best things we can have to enhance our sense [word form error ]of happiness and comfort.
as I said before, building (basic constructions)[ infrastructure ], such as railways and roads, is a fantastic way to reduce the unemployment rate. With low requirements and high rewards, the number of people willing to engage[unclear ] (will be big)[zero-conditional ]. [ punctuation error with coordinating conjunction ]So to some extent, improving public transportation can be viewed as a way to solve social problems. [ punctuation error ]And that’s why the basic construction[ unclear ] is tightly bounded with policy. However, the internet development is more flexible and less useful in terms of solving social problems because of higher demands.
Last but not least. [grammatical error ]The public transportation is[becomes ] more useful if we view[ grammatical error ] the question in the long run. For instance, we can never transport our soldiers by the internet, but railways will do this job. We can’t know how big a city can be, so the traffic system should have high limits[ unclear ].
All in all, although the [ article error ]internet technology is improving fast. [ grammatical error ]We should still pay enough attention to public transportation. As a result, we should take the extra money spent on it for granted.