Reply To: The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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April 20, 2021 at 2:27 am

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 30% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
  2. About 40% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );
  3. Lengthy paragraphs; restrict each paragraph to 90words. 

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