Reply To: The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
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I don’t think the rules in societies are too strict for young people to follow nowadays. The young must comply with specific regulations to maintain the order and etiquette of the community.
Basic rules like( mustn’t break the laws)[grammatical error ], [ punctuation error ]are so fundamental[ repetition/’basic’ ] that every citizen should obey. They[ unclear pronoun ]’re the duty of every adult which [grammatical error ]preserve[ grammatical error ] our societies well-organized. These rules have existed for centuries and[ unmatched /have done-will : change sentence structure ] will continue to be effective because of their necessity. So following them is easy for every grown-up, including young people.
Another kind[/type ] of rules includes (lending others helping hands)[wrong phrase ], being diligent, and respecting others. They are not written black and white but[ unmatched ] are also what young people should follow. However, I don’t think we passively ‘follow’ these rules, but ‘choose’ to behave accordingly after attempts[ grammatical error ]. Recall when we were (kids in kindergartens)[repetition ], teachers always taught us to share
with others. Although unwilling[ grammatical error ], we still handed over our toy to another kid and received his/her toy. To our surprise, we discovered that his/her toy was new and engaging. By sharing and exchanging, we enjoyed (double happiness)[ unclear ]. (After this experience, we)[ confusing ] learn[ grammatical error ] that sharing is a good exercise as it generates delight and promotes friendships[word form error ]. So for the rest of our lives, we will continue sharing with others. In this way[ wrong transition ], following these rules is internalizing them in essence. It[unclear pronoun ]’s the free will of young people, thus not being strict for them.
In conclusion, obeying social rules is either basic[vague word ] or pleasant for us, so it’s never too[ incorrect adverb ] strict.