Reply To: Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation’s history. some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by new ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress?

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation’s history. some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by new ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress? Reply To: Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation’s history. some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by new ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress?

April 24, 2021 at 2:36 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
  2. About 20% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision ).

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