Reply To: TPO1 Integrated writing — four-day workweek
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The reading [ passage ] describes [ the ] benefits [ of implementing a four-day workweek policy ] to the companies, the country and the employees of
a four-day workweek[ misplaced ] ,[ punctuation error ] whereas the listening part opposes these influences[word choice issue ] .
[ First, ] While paying [ dangling ] less to those four-day employees and hiring [ dangling ] more staff will ensure the same workload without additional costs, according to the speaker,
the companies’[ corporate ] profits will decrease.
[First, according to the speaker, paying four-day employees less and hiring more staff could ensure the same amounts of workload being completed without adding additional costs-. ]
[ However, hiring ]
Hiring more staff would[ could ] result in [additional spending ] more money spent on training and medical insurance. Also, more employees require more[ expanded ] office space and [ facilities such as ] computers [ and printers ] . Such costs would[ could significantly ] reduce [ corporate ] the profits of companies (a lot) [ informal ] .
The lecturer also[ incorrect adverb ] refutes the reading’s claim that the option for four-day work could[ would ] reduce unemployment rates. There are [ avoid using THERE BE ] substitutes to accomplish[complete ] the same task without hiring new staff. Companies can make employees work overtime [ in order to complete the five-day workload ] . [ choppy sentence ]
Besides, the four-day employees would be even required to complete the five-day work. If so, the unemployment rate will[ zero-conditional ] not decrease.
Finally, the speaker casts doubt[ about the fact] that four-day employees have a better life quality. Because less time spent on work equals a decline in job ability[ unclear ] , they are more likely to lose their jobs during an economic downturn. [ punctuation error ] And they may not be promoted since five-day employees are more likely to have these chances [ confusion ] .