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Recent years have seen the[article error ]( tremendous expansion of the[article error ] metropolises)[ unclear ]. Therefore[ incorrect transition ], some people advocate that this urban sprawl is[ grammatical error ] of benefit to society. [ With respect, ]I disagree.
Admittedly, (many new opportunities)[ irrelevant to the topic ] are (opening up)[unclear ] with a[article error ] rapid urban growth. One is that city[/urban ] dwellers have access to more chance[word form error ] of getting a decent job. From world-famous companies, investment banks, film studios to local factories, they[unclear pronoun ] (all prefer)[ zero-conditional ] big cities, therefore providing
various[ many ] jobs for (all kinds)[zero-conditional ] of job seekers in cities. Communities can also benefit from adapting historic buildings to suit modern needs. As the rehabilitation of the Vogue Theatre in Manistee, Michigan, shows, renovating such buildings can be a source of [fosters ]community spirit and [ facilitates ]economic growth.
if a city continues to grow at a phenomenal rate, it has [rapid city expansion also brings ]more negative effects than positive ones. Ongoing rapid urbanization usually contributes to a deterioration in the living standards. This has primarily happened due to the [For instance, ]mass migration to cities [ can reduce urban educational, health care and living standards due to limited available resources ]. Because of a surge of immigrants, local cities don’t have a corresponding increase in resources such as education, health care and other amenities. As a result, governments may run the risk of inadequate schools and insufficient budget to cover rising social welfare costs. It is thus unsurprising that one-third of the urban population in developing countries resides in slum conditions.[factual error: need proof for this ]
Urban growth also brings[ /creates ] negative impacts[word form error ] on the local environment. Since
it is hard to accommodate [ accomodating ]this rapid expansion in urban-dwelling [requires/involves expanded residential capacities ], the supply of housing (can’t)[zero-conditional ] keep up with[article error ] demand. As a result, inner-city rents[leasing price rises ] soar and (drive people)[ unclear ], (especially those less well-off)[ misplaced ], to live on the outskirts of cities where rent is lower. Affordable homes come at the expense of convenient traffic. People have to spend long hours on trains, private cars or buses day in and day out. What is worse, Vehicle missions will cause air pollution, leading to severe respiratory diseases such as asthma. By contrast, if urban development slows down, these problems could be resolved by building satellite cities, a measure aims to help diffuse the population, enlarge infrastructure and limit the number of cars in the city.