Reply To: The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. GRE Writing The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries. Reply To: The greatness of individuals can be decided only by those who live after them, not by their contemporaries.

April 29, 2021 at 7:36 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 50% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
  2. About 40% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );
  3. Lengthy paragraphs; restrict each paragraph to 110 words.

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