Reply To: The rapid growth of cities has a mostly positive impact on the development of the society.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. TOEFL Writing The rapid growth of cities has a mostly positive impact on the development of the society. Reply To: The rapid growth of cities has a mostly positive impact on the development of the society.

April 30, 2021 at 7:21 pm

Score: ungraded

Issues:

  1. About 40% of the sentences exceed 20 words. Simplify or split them. (TOEFL/IELTS: 15%- qualifies for non-software revision; 30% applies to GRE writing)
  2. About 15% of the sentences are passive; convert them into their active counterparts. (10%- qualifies for non-software TOEFL/IELTS/GRE writing revision );
  3. Lots of spacing errors.

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