Reply To: Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer.

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer. Reply To: Some people claim that public museums and art galleries will not be needed because people can see historical objects and works of art by using a computer.

January 15, 2020 at 2:54 am

Score: 59.5

Issues:

  1. More than 25% of the sentences contain 20+ words. Shorten/split them.
  2. More than 15% of the sentences are passive. Convert them into their active counterparts.

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