Reply To: Studies show that criminals get a low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

TOEFL, IELTS, Personal Statement and CV Proofreading Services. IELTS Writing Studies show that criminals get a low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Reply To: Studies show that criminals get a low level of education. Some people believe that the best way to reduce crime is educating people in prison so they can get a job after leaving prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

January 25, 2020 at 10:14 pm

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Some people reckon that (education in prison) [unclear  ] will decline the crime rate effectively[inappropriate word position  ] , [  punctuation error] given the situation[wrong word  ] that many crimes result from poor education[ logical confusion ] . From my perspective, prison education[unclear  ] (plays a significant role in)[ wordy-facilitates ] criminals’  rehabilitation[ punctuation error in relation to coordinating word ] but some concerns still remain.

Many criminals, like[ such as ] thieves, shoplifters and hijackers[ punctuation error ] used to do menial work and lack[tense inconsistency/did-do  ] [ article error ] required skills for decent jobs. To make it worse, chances are that they can settle down again are throttled by[passive  ] the insufficient work qualifications. In that case, education targeting at vocational training can (do enormous amounts to the possibility of)[wordy  ] (a criminal’ being employed)[ redundant ] . [punctuation error in relation to coordinating word  ] And those offenders will be less likely to commit crimes again for living necessities.

Nevertheless, not all crimes are property cases[ unclear ] . Another group of malefactors, such as series[preposition error  ] murderers, paedophiles[ spelling ] and so on, committed crimes in pursuit of psychological satisfaction. A qualified psychologist, therefore, appears (to do)[ unclear ] more than an experienced teacher can[ wrong verb ] . [ punctuation error concerning coordinating word ] And the major hindrance for a criminal to find a job (is not)[BE Verb/NOT  ] a scarcity of education. [  The hindrance to criminals’ job efforts relates less to their poor education than to the public concern of their potential, violent behaviors] It is the general impression of violent[ word form ] -orientation that a criminal record brings, which a prominent academic background can not improve. As a result, the isolation and discrimination towards offenders may irritate[wrong word/encourage  ] their anti-social behaviours again.

The bias still exists. Surely prison education[unclear  ] (does a lot for)[ wordy/informal – helps ] criminals to blend[ wrong word ] in society after serving the sentences. But the limitation( is here)[unclear  ] and it can not be ignored. (The funny thing is that maybe we are the ones who should receive an education.)[ unclear ]